I had a little bit too much fun with this one, perhaps. I set out to show you three different ways of opening your story -- one with description, one with action and one with dialogue. The section on Description went longer than I expected (but it's still interesting!), so I decided to follow this episode up with a Part Two.
Tell me what you thought of the show as well as my writing sample.
Regards,
Tom
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I really liked the description in your sample for this show... looking back on the notes, I am impressed with how well the reader can get a glimpse of your character's personality without you directly saying much about the character at all. Almost everything one knows about the character is implied through the setting, the envirionment, the mood... One gets to know the main character in the first three paragraphs, even though they aren't really about the character-- the opening seems to serve two functions in one...
That's actually what I intended. I wanted to avoid using exposition in the description of the character and wanted to imply information about him rather than hammer the reader with it. Furthermore, the overall affect is a mysterious one, which was appropriate for the passage. I hoped that I could draw in my reader by casting a mysterious light on my character.
Its all about description! Tom showed us several ways that were all helpful. I absolutely agree with Umbrael!
I have always been heavy on description -- and in the internal landscape of the character. It's probably more tangible than my external setting -- and so far, no one that has read it is complaining much. Still, I have to go back and add some description of the environment.
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